Comments on: Upside Down http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/ Surviving Motherhood One Child at a Time Fri, 18 May 2012 17:56:13 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Melissa (Confessions of a Dr.Mom) http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4086 Melissa (Confessions of a Dr.Mom) Mon, 14 Feb 2011 06:26:10 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4086 Great story, I could picture the whole thing. You had me hooked. SO scary! Great story, I could picture the whole thing. You had me hooked. SO scary!
Melissa (Confessions of a Dr.Mom)´s last [type] ..Crashing Down

]]> By: Mad Woman behind the Blog http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4076 Mad Woman behind the Blog Sun, 13 Feb 2011 04:25:02 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4076 I too wondered if she was miscarrying or going into labor. I held my very pregnant belly through this whole piece. And am keeping my cell phone attached to my body until I deliver. Thanks. I too wondered if she was miscarrying or going into labor. I held my very pregnant belly through this whole piece. And am keeping my cell phone attached to my body until I deliver. Thanks.

]]> By: Miri http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4075 Miri Sat, 12 Feb 2011 23:31:03 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4075 This is great! You had me all along and then when her water broke it sent me right back to my own crazy births. I want to know what happens next - does someone come along, is the baby ok? This is great! You had me all along and then when her water broke it sent me right back to my own crazy births. I want to know what happens next – does someone come along, is the baby ok?
Miri´s last [type] ..At Grandma Millie’s Place

]]> By: Cheryl @ Mommypants http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4074 Cheryl @ Mommypants Sat, 12 Feb 2011 19:34:24 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4074 I can't imagine the terror. Very scary! You captured it well. But did her water break or was she having a miscarriage? I need to know! ;) I can’t imagine the terror. Very scary! You captured it well. But did her water break or was she having a miscarriage? I need to know! ;)

]]> By: Jennifer http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4070 Jennifer Sat, 12 Feb 2011 01:11:03 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4070 The strongest part for me was I felt that the emotional swings that the narrator has are exactly what someone would feel, she swings from berating herself for going out at all, to panic to problem solving and back to panic. Because she was pregnant and because she was immediately worried about that a nice tension was created because the reader wants them both to survive, and what a price to pay for surviving. The strongest part for me was I felt that the emotional swings that the narrator has are exactly what someone would feel, she swings from berating herself for going out at all, to panic to problem solving and back to panic. Because she was pregnant and because she was immediately worried about that a nice tension was created because the reader wants them both to survive, and what a price to pay for surviving.
Jennifer´s last [type] ..Knock- Knock

]]> By: Sauco http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4068 Sauco Sat, 12 Feb 2011 00:11:58 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4068 Good story--I want to know what happens next. Good story–I want to know what happens next.

]]> By: liz http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4066 liz Fri, 11 Feb 2011 20:44:43 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4066 On my goodness! How completely terrifying, even though it's fictional! As a mama to so many kids, this had to be so hard to write! On my goodness! How completely terrifying, even though it’s fictional!

As a mama to so many kids, this had to be so hard to write!
liz´s last [type] ..Don&8217t Blog- TWEET!

]]> By: Mandyland http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4063 Mandyland Fri, 11 Feb 2011 18:06:27 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4063 Oh my God. I was rivited by this story. My hands were clenched in fear and my eyes were glued to the screen. I can't even imagine. Amazing, amazing, amazing. Oh my God. I was rivited by this story. My hands were clenched in fear and my eyes were glued to the screen. I can’t even imagine.

Amazing, amazing, amazing.
Mandyland´s last [type] ..Wordless Wednesday

]]> By: Stacey http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4062 Stacey Fri, 11 Feb 2011 15:42:05 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4062 Thank you for your constructive criticism! I've learned that I can't improve if everyone just tells me it's good. So I really appreciate those that feel as though they can give some advice! I'm not sure I would have survived high school math without you! I did my very best to avoid it in college and was quite successful! LOL Are you available in a few years for my kids? They are in big trouble if they want me to help! Thank you for your constructive criticism! I’ve learned that I can’t improve if everyone just tells me it’s good. So I really appreciate those that feel as though they can give some advice!

I’m not sure I would have survived high school math without you! I did my very best to avoid it in college and was quite successful! LOL Are you available in a few years for my kids? They are in big trouble if they want me to help!

]]> By: Jen M http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/02/pregnancy-upside-down-story/comment-page-1/#comment-4061 Jen M Fri, 11 Feb 2011 15:29:53 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=1470#comment-4061 That's good! I like the way you made the reader start to relax when she gets out of the truck and then you right turn to the water breaking. I actually got a bit of an adrenalin rush, with prickeling eyes. It stimulates a very accessible emotion to anyone who has been pregnant. I'm going to presume upon the priviliges of an old friend who was once in the habit of helping you with school work and give you some constructive criticism. (And because as an engineer, it's my way.) :) The one thing I'd change about this passage is in the second paragraph where you said "and had no way of knowing if life still flourished within me". It feels a little contrived to me, like you're trying a bit too hard to write descriptively. Maybe play around with it a bit to keep the voice more consistent with the rest of the piece. In all, though, great job! I'm enjoying seeing you try out different things! That’s good! I like the way you made the reader start to relax when she gets out of the truck and then you right turn to the water breaking. I actually got a bit of an adrenalin rush, with prickeling eyes. It stimulates a very accessible emotion to anyone who has been pregnant.

I’m going to presume upon the priviliges of an old friend who was once in the habit of helping you with school work and give you some constructive criticism. (And because as an engineer, it’s my way.) :) The one thing I’d change about this passage is in the second paragraph where you said “and had no way of knowing if life still flourished within me”. It feels a little contrived to me, like you’re trying a bit too hard to write descriptively. Maybe play around with it a bit to keep the voice more consistent with the rest of the piece.

In all, though, great job! I’m enjoying seeing you try out different things!
Jen M´s last [type] ..2011 Week 1

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