Comments on: 160 characters http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/ Surviving Motherhood One Child at a Time Fri, 18 May 2012 17:56:13 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Kris http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5583 Kris Sat, 22 Oct 2011 19:27:11 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5583 Ha. I don't know why, but I didn't read the copy before the txt msg. Trying to read fast I guess. It is scary as it is. No intro necessary. Nice job. Ha. I don’t know why, but I didn’t read the copy before the txt msg. Trying to read fast I guess. It is scary as it is. No intro necessary. Nice job.
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]]> By: angela http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5580 angela Sat, 22 Oct 2011 00:51:00 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5580 I think the text itself is scary and would have fit the prompt better than using any introduction, to be honest. I understand that the other details are a continuation of what has alreay happened, but I think it would have been just as scary to read: I know what you saw. It’s not what you think. You shouldn’t snoop around other people’s homes. It’s not polite. or even: I reached for my ice water and took long, deep gulps. My cell chimed: I know what you saw. It’s not what you think. You shouldn’t snoop around other people’s homes. It’s not polite. I think the text itself is scary and would have fit the prompt better than using any introduction, to be honest.

I understand that the other details are a continuation of what has alreay happened, but I think it would have been just as scary to read:

I know what you saw. It’s not what you think. You shouldn’t snoop around other people’s homes. It’s not polite.

or even:

I reached for my ice water and took long, deep gulps. My cell chimed:

I know what you saw. It’s not what you think. You shouldn’t snoop around other people’s homes. It’s not polite.

]]> By: Galit Breen http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5578 Galit Breen Fri, 21 Oct 2011 21:16:19 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5578 Aak! Love this and absolutely adore that you went for pushing your story forward! Aak! Love this and absolutely adore that you went for pushing your story forward!
Galit Breen´s last [type] ..Text A Story

]]> By: Jessica@Team Rasler http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5577 Jessica@Team Rasler Fri, 21 Oct 2011 20:37:48 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5577 Excellent! I didn't see the last paragraph (you must've decided to delete it) but it totally works as is! Excellent! I didn’t see the last paragraph (you must’ve decided to delete it) but it totally works as is!
Jessica@Team Rasler´s last [type] ..But why?

]]> By: Venus http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5575 Venus Fri, 21 Oct 2011 18:52:28 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5575 Great! Haven't we all felt the fear of being discovered doing something we weren't meant to? That rings true and makes it much more scary. :-) Great! Haven’t we all felt the fear of being discovered doing something we weren’t meant to? That rings true and makes it much more scary. :-)

]]> By: Carrie http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5574 Carrie Fri, 21 Oct 2011 17:31:04 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5574 for such a polite text, it defintiely gives me the shivers for such a polite text, it defintiely gives me the shivers
Carrie´s last [type] ..Red Writing Hood: Warning

]]> By: Karen Peterson http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5573 Karen Peterson Fri, 21 Oct 2011 17:09:03 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5573 I don't know which is more anxiety-inducing. Snooping around someone's home or finding out that someone else knows you did! I don’t know which is more anxiety-inducing. Snooping around someone’s home or finding out that someone else knows you did!
Karen Peterson´s last [type] ..Trapped

]]> By: Kir http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5572 Kir Fri, 21 Oct 2011 16:21:55 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5572 I agree, you don't need that first paragraph. the one before the text does the work...and who wouldn't be SHAKEN reading this? WOW...great great job! I agree, you don’t need that first paragraph. the one before the text does the work…and who wouldn’t be SHAKEN reading this?

WOW…great great job!
Kir´s last [type] ..WOE: Kimmy: There’s Been An Accident

]]> By: idiosyncraticeye http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5571 idiosyncraticeye Fri, 21 Oct 2011 15:58:22 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5571 Ooh, intriguing! :) Ooh, intriguing! :)

]]> By: Stacey http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/2011/10/160-characters/comment-page-1/#comment-5569 Stacey Fri, 21 Oct 2011 15:46:09 +0000 http://staceysmotheringmoments.com/?p=2203#comment-5569 I went back and forth on that so much! Maybe I will go back and delete it. Thanks for the concrit! I went back and forth on that so much! Maybe I will go back and delete it. Thanks for the concrit!

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